WEBVTT - Episode 4 - A Neurotic Thriller 0:00:05.080 --> 0:00:08.240 Welcome to get it to Dutch. A screenwriter's journey. I'm marked, 0:00:08.320 --> 0:00:12.520 that's Greg, that's Brendan, for a team of Hollywood screenwriters 0:00:12.640 --> 0:00:15.240 who meet every week to read from original screenplay that 0:00:15.320 --> 0:00:17.640 one of us has written. We give notes, we rank 0:00:17.720 --> 0:00:19.120 the scripts, and at the end of the season, we're 0:00:19.120 --> 0:00:22.040 going to pitch the best script to big time Hollywood 0:00:22.079 --> 0:00:26.000 producer Dutch Huxley, who is dead, so instead we're pitching 0:00:26.040 --> 0:00:28.600 to his son, Duck, who's rumored to be taking over 0:00:28.640 --> 0:00:33.040 his dad's empire at Victory Pictures. WHOA, I have feeling 0:00:33.200 --> 0:00:36.479 great today. Wow, let's get into it. This is my script. 0:00:36.520 --> 0:00:37.320 I cannot wait. 0:00:37.479 --> 0:00:40.400 What is going on? This is a new Mark. 0:00:40.560 --> 0:00:42.600 I'm Brendan. I have to say that or I can't 0:00:42.680 --> 0:00:43.040 do it. 0:00:43.120 --> 0:00:44.240 Here's the deal, guys. 0:00:44.360 --> 0:00:49.199 I have started a new process, a new philosophy, a 0:00:49.280 --> 0:00:51.360 new life journey. 0:00:51.000 --> 0:00:53.440 Oh, a new screenwriting, A new screenwriting process. 0:00:53.560 --> 0:00:58.120 I have not ejaculated in one hundred and forty four hours. WHOA, 0:00:58.160 --> 0:01:01.960 I'm on a semen retention plan and I feel unstoppable. 0:01:02.240 --> 0:01:04.959 Okay, my mind has never been so clear, and that. 0:01:04.920 --> 0:01:06.240 Why the apartment is so clean. 0:01:06.480 --> 0:01:07.360 Well, I was. 0:01:07.319 --> 0:01:09.760 Awake at three point thirty in the morning. I cleaned 0:01:09.800 --> 0:01:13.600 everything up and I sort of fang schwayed it in 0:01:13.640 --> 0:01:15.399 a way. And it's not even something that I read 0:01:15.440 --> 0:01:18.480 in a book. I just felt the energy of the room. 0:01:18.520 --> 0:01:20.240 Buddy. I feel like I'm in a whole new place. 0:01:20.800 --> 0:01:21.920 Doesn't it feel good? 0:01:22.000 --> 0:01:24.800 Curtains are open, there's light in here, the windows are open, 0:01:24.840 --> 0:01:27.399 it's not boiling hot. I'm not sitting on a waste bench. 0:01:27.440 --> 0:01:31.160 I'm sitting on the very nicely new reupholstered chair here. 0:01:31.160 --> 0:01:34.080 I tore down all the posters and I painted what 0:01:34.280 --> 0:01:35.600 I feel inside. 0:01:35.840 --> 0:01:38.319 Look at that. That could be in a museum. 0:01:37.959 --> 0:01:39.440 Buddy, This is unreal. 0:01:39.600 --> 0:01:40.920 That could be in a museum. 0:01:41.040 --> 0:01:42.080 Yeah, I think it could. 0:01:43.160 --> 0:01:44.920 God damn it. I feel good. 0:01:45.040 --> 0:01:47.080 Was that you up on the roof last night? Because 0:01:47.160 --> 0:01:50.040 the landlord, mister Hartunian, came by and he asked if 0:01:50.040 --> 0:01:52.280 you were running around on the roof and I said, 0:01:52.320 --> 0:01:52.880 I didn't know. 0:01:53.040 --> 0:01:57.440 I'm teaching myself, Parkour. Here's the thing, semen retention. Have 0:01:57.520 --> 0:01:58.360 you ever done it before? 0:01:58.520 --> 0:01:58.720 Oh? 0:01:58.840 --> 0:02:01.880 No, it's proven by science. Joe Rogan had a scientist 0:02:01.920 --> 0:02:04.000 on his show. He explained it better than I. 0:02:04.280 --> 0:02:06.880 Rogan scientists, but he he'll tell you. 0:02:07.040 --> 0:02:09.160 I don't want to get into the The proof is 0:02:09.160 --> 0:02:09.640 in the pudding. 0:02:09.680 --> 0:02:11.520 You don't want to get into the science, So there isn't. 0:02:11.720 --> 0:02:13.440 I mean, I could get into the science of it, but. 0:02:13.639 --> 0:02:17.000 You're actually putting. Their proof is in you not making pudding. 0:02:17.320 --> 0:02:20.320 I don't have to putting. The proof is in the putt. 0:02:20.440 --> 0:02:24.560 You're covered in a kind of a gleam listener, he's shining. 0:02:24.880 --> 0:02:26.960 He hasn't. I haven't seen him blink yet. 0:02:27.200 --> 0:02:30.079 My sweat smells sweet. Have you noticed that? 0:02:30.160 --> 0:02:30.960 What's that in the corner? 0:02:31.000 --> 0:02:31.840 It's like, uava. 0:02:32.600 --> 0:02:33.160 Are you trying? 0:02:33.960 --> 0:02:36.359 I don't know. I don't know. I don't know. You're good. 0:02:36.560 --> 0:02:39.200 You're like crying pre comb or something. It's sticky. 0:02:39.760 --> 0:02:42.760 Get get your fingers out of my eyes, man, get 0:02:42.800 --> 0:02:45.240 your fingers out of my eyes. I can I know 0:02:45.280 --> 0:02:46.200 how to break fingers. 0:02:46.280 --> 0:02:47.799 I know. I'm just going to ask that you talk 0:02:47.960 --> 0:02:49.000 a little bit quieter. 0:02:49.400 --> 0:02:51.800 Has anybody seen so the weight pench is gone? 0:02:52.000 --> 0:02:52.280 Yeah? 0:02:52.440 --> 0:02:53.560 This chair is amazing. 0:02:53.560 --> 0:02:55.000 I don't I found that in the alley and re 0:02:55.160 --> 0:02:55.760 upholstered it. 0:02:55.880 --> 0:02:57.240 I don't know how I'm gonna work out now. 0:02:57.400 --> 0:02:59.400 It's very comfortable, but I'm very itchy. 0:02:59.600 --> 0:03:02.120 Let's get in a new business. I am. I'm done 0:03:02.120 --> 0:03:04.720 with the intro new business. Brendan got well. 0:03:05.600 --> 0:03:07.679 First off, I want to thank everybody who reached out 0:03:07.720 --> 0:03:10.360 to me last week when I was down about not 0:03:10.440 --> 0:03:12.959 hearing about my callback. I know we haven't released the 0:03:13.000 --> 0:03:15.400 episode yet, but I'm just pre thanking people who are 0:03:15.400 --> 0:03:16.919 probably going to reach out. You're sort of. 0:03:17.040 --> 0:03:20.120 Pre pre coming, you're pre coming of thanks. 0:03:20.440 --> 0:03:23.799 But everything is turned around. Apparently in this town. When 0:03:23.840 --> 0:03:26.920 somebody says they're a big fan, they're a big fan. 0:03:27.040 --> 0:03:28.919 Baby, right, what happened? 0:03:29.120 --> 0:03:36.360 Because I will be network testing hey on Big Wonders. 0:03:38.480 --> 0:03:41.720 Everything is working out. That's great. So you don't hate 0:03:41.720 --> 0:03:42.120 the show. 0:03:42.280 --> 0:03:44.400 No, you know what, I never did. Thought it was 0:03:44.440 --> 0:03:47.640 a brilliant idea. I think going back to what we 0:03:47.720 --> 0:03:50.880 loved as youth is an amazing thing to do. I 0:03:50.880 --> 0:03:52.760 think Small Wonder was a great show. I think Big 0:03:52.800 --> 0:03:55.320 Wonder is going to be an even better show. What 0:03:55.400 --> 0:03:58.040 a great turn of events. Congrats me, Thank you. I 0:03:58.520 --> 0:04:00.960 really can't believe it, and I feel. 0:04:00.680 --> 0:04:03.760 Like I feel like not to steal your thunder. But 0:04:03.880 --> 0:04:08.160 when someone is so positive and emitting such positive vibes, 0:04:08.360 --> 0:04:11.000 that extends out to people in their surroundings, and I 0:04:11.040 --> 0:04:12.440 feel like that's what I'm doing. 0:04:12.600 --> 0:04:14.240 Oh great, go ahead. 0:04:14.240 --> 0:04:17.680 Okay, Al, you don't have to grab my arm so hard. 0:04:17.720 --> 0:04:20.279 So here we go. New business for me. I've been 0:04:20.320 --> 0:04:23.840 hanging out a lot with Ducks, so I'm feeling like 0:04:23.920 --> 0:04:26.120 I'm going to approach him pretty soon about bringing him 0:04:26.120 --> 0:04:26.800 some ideas. 0:04:26.880 --> 0:04:29.920 But haven't haven't sent, haven't pitched him anything yet. 0:04:29.960 --> 0:04:31.400 No, no, no, no, I don't want to cross the 0:04:31.480 --> 0:04:33.640 I don't want to cross the rubicon quite yet. But 0:04:33.839 --> 0:04:36.080 my face, are you about to come? 0:04:36.279 --> 0:04:40.040 No, I'm wincing because I feel like time is at hand. 0:04:40.080 --> 0:04:41.400 We want to get him something. 0:04:41.480 --> 0:04:44.000 Let's just play this cool. We were out on the 0:04:44.040 --> 0:04:47.000 duck boat this weekend, so that was fun. 0:04:47.560 --> 0:04:48.160 His yacht. 0:04:48.360 --> 0:04:51.080 No, he actually has a duck boat that he bought 0:04:51.080 --> 0:04:52.760 when he was on one of those tours in Boston, 0:04:52.800 --> 0:04:54.520 the ones that go on the land and the sea, 0:04:54.560 --> 0:04:57.120 and he just had it repurposed and now it's kind 0:04:57.120 --> 0:04:59.080 of his private party duck boat. You know, we'll be 0:04:59.120 --> 0:05:01.000 out on the water that we up to a restaurant 0:05:01.080 --> 0:05:02.080 and that's ducks. 0:05:02.200 --> 0:05:04.159 I swear to god, I saw that out in front 0:05:04.160 --> 0:05:04.640 of Spago. 0:05:04.800 --> 0:05:06.400 Yeah, A couple weeks ago. He likes to park it 0:05:06.440 --> 0:05:07.960 on the retention pond behind Spago. 0:05:08.279 --> 0:05:09.640 Wow, that's duck. 0:05:09.760 --> 0:05:10.320 That's duck. 0:05:10.480 --> 0:05:13.880 Speaking of retention, I want to talk more about semen retention. 0:05:14.839 --> 0:05:17.200 And here's what I did this morning. I cranked out 0:05:17.240 --> 0:05:17.560 a new. 0:05:17.520 --> 0:05:19.320 Script and this morning. 0:05:19.360 --> 0:05:22.279 This morning, so I'm on the Marky Mark schedule and 0:05:22.440 --> 0:05:24.800 the Dwayne the Rock diet Johnson diet. 0:05:24.800 --> 0:05:26.520 I think he goes by Mark Wahlberg now. 0:05:26.400 --> 0:05:29.080 Mark Wahlberg, Yeah, And I think the Rock's just he's 0:05:29.120 --> 0:05:31.640 the Rock. So I'm on the Wallberg the Rock, you know, 0:05:31.800 --> 0:05:34.200 schedule diet. I wake up at three point thirty. I 0:05:34.279 --> 0:05:36.360 work out, Okay. 0:05:36.120 --> 0:05:37.800 Yeah, could you keep that down? Honestly? 0:05:39.040 --> 0:05:41.320 I will, so I looked. I lift weights for two hours. 0:05:41.400 --> 0:05:43.960 I eat six hard boiled eggs and a can of sardines. 0:05:44.160 --> 0:05:44.520 Wow. 0:05:44.640 --> 0:05:46.240 I jump right into an hour and a half of 0:05:46.279 --> 0:05:49.640 cardio and core. Okay, eat a farmer's breakfast, then run 0:05:49.720 --> 0:05:53.039 six miles, meditate for an hour. Cool down with third breakfast, 0:05:53.080 --> 0:05:56.120 which is usually tuna fish wrapped in a hamsteak. 0:05:56.279 --> 0:05:58.320 Third breakfast, You're like a jacked up hobbit. 0:05:58.480 --> 0:06:00.599 And then I start writing and I shit out this 0:06:00.680 --> 0:06:02.279 bad dog. Between nine and ten am. 0:06:02.440 --> 0:06:05.120 Oh my god, it's a full script for Yeah. 0:06:05.160 --> 0:06:06.920 Wow, fucking crushed it. 0:06:07.000 --> 0:06:08.839 Holy moly, Well congrats Mark. 0:06:08.920 --> 0:06:09.440 This is great. 0:06:09.640 --> 0:06:11.320 But I thought this week you were gonna I thought 0:06:11.400 --> 0:06:13.599 you were working on my big fat Greek yogurt script 0:06:13.640 --> 0:06:15.160 about the guy who started Chobani. 0:06:15.279 --> 0:06:18.520 Yeah, that's back burner for now, maybe forever. I need 0:06:18.560 --> 0:06:20.920 to write my own stories, is what I realized. And 0:06:21.240 --> 0:06:24.120 this one's an erotic thriller. And like I said, I 0:06:24.160 --> 0:06:26.680 cranked it out in under an hour before very down. 0:06:26.800 --> 0:06:28.760 We haven't seen an erotic thriller in a while. They 0:06:29.080 --> 0:06:31.679 feel like they what was the last great erotic thriller? 0:06:32.200 --> 0:06:37.760 Oh? The Avatar? Hmm hmmm, right, would you? You wouldn't 0:06:37.760 --> 0:06:39.280 classify that erotic. 0:06:38.920 --> 0:06:40.479 Thriller, wouldn't call it a thriller. 0:06:40.920 --> 0:06:41.920 You call it erotic though? 0:06:41.960 --> 0:06:42.520 Turned me on. 0:06:42.800 --> 0:06:43.480 God dang. 0:06:43.600 --> 0:06:45.840 The point is it's been a while since there's been 0:06:45.839 --> 0:06:48.040 an erotic thriller. I guess that's the point I was making. 0:06:48.200 --> 0:06:51.159 Ye, Yeah, I think it's due time. So this one 0:06:51.240 --> 0:06:54.400 is called Edge of Desire. It's about a detective with 0:06:54.480 --> 0:06:57.760 a dark past and some very dark secrets who gets 0:06:57.800 --> 0:07:00.880 pulled into an erotic world of thrills. 0:07:01.160 --> 0:07:02.800 Oh, thrills. 0:07:02.800 --> 0:07:05.760 It's a thriller. So let's jump in at page one. 0:07:05.920 --> 0:07:07.920 I don't want to miss a thing. Your parts are 0:07:07.960 --> 0:07:09.360 Mark Brendan, you're on stage. 0:07:09.400 --> 0:07:13.560 Dresser does I don't want to and let's get into it. 0:07:13.720 --> 0:07:15.119 Okay? Is everybody ready? 0:07:15.200 --> 0:07:16.720 Ready? Been ready? 0:07:16.720 --> 0:07:17.040 All right? 0:07:17.480 --> 0:07:20.960 Exterior Houseboat night, sound of a couple in the throes 0:07:21.000 --> 0:07:25.000 of ecstasy echo across the Placid Harbor. Cut two. Interior 0:07:25.080 --> 0:07:28.880 Houseboat continuous from the back, we see Detective Jack long 0:07:28.920 --> 0:07:32.800 finger forties, cool as a polar bears toe now but 0:07:33.040 --> 0:07:35.520 the years are beginning of the show. He sits on 0:07:35.560 --> 0:07:41.240 a folding chair, naked, painfully pleasury on the TV. An 0:07:41.240 --> 0:07:44.480 Italian woman gets pounded from behind by a chubby tweedledee 0:07:44.960 --> 0:07:48.360 as a horse watches. Jack whispers to himself. 0:07:48.600 --> 0:07:51.920 First base bucker, second base, Spirit. 0:07:51.800 --> 0:07:54.640 Around the room, liquor bottles, dirty clothes, A red Sox 0:07:54.680 --> 0:07:57.679 pennant hangs limply over a murphy bed on the fridge. 0:07:57.720 --> 0:08:00.600 A curling photograph of a smiling family and a gorgeous 0:08:00.600 --> 0:08:03.080 blonde woman who holds a baby next to a golden 0:08:03.120 --> 0:08:06.280 retriever and a clean cut man. Could that be Jack 0:08:06.560 --> 0:08:07.160 from the TV? 0:08:07.320 --> 0:08:11.720 The Italian woman mons Benee Bennie Bennee. 0:08:12.160 --> 0:08:14.360 Jack's drenched in sweat. He's getting close. 0:08:14.480 --> 0:08:17.280 Third base bogs short stop. 0:08:17.760 --> 0:08:19.960 I can't, I can't. 0:08:22.320 --> 0:08:24.880 Cut two. Outside the boat, the TV and VCR smashed 0:08:24.920 --> 0:08:27.240 through the porthole and splash into the bay. As the 0:08:27.320 --> 0:08:30.600 VCR sinks into the dark, swirling water, Wei crosses all 0:08:30.640 --> 0:08:34.439 too Interior Police Department, next day, a swirling cup of coffee. 0:08:34.760 --> 0:08:37.920 Jack is at his desk, a cold compress against his head. 0:08:38.240 --> 0:08:40.480 He's clean, but not neat, in a suit and tie. 0:08:40.800 --> 0:08:43.160 He rifles through a drawer and comes up with some aspirin, 0:08:43.480 --> 0:08:46.160 chews violently and chases it with a pull from a flask. 0:08:46.600 --> 0:08:49.400 From off screen, we hear you look like shit, Jack. 0:08:49.640 --> 0:08:54.520 A beautiful secretary Diane. She leans in seductively, cleavage on 0:08:54.600 --> 0:08:55.280 full display. 0:08:55.520 --> 0:08:57.160 Yeah, well, I feel even worse. 0:08:57.559 --> 0:08:59.400 Chief wants to see you cut two. 0:08:59.440 --> 0:09:03.240 Interior Chief's Office, Chief Ron beefeed Er slides a crime 0:09:03.280 --> 0:09:06.040 scene photo of a mutilated naked man's corpse and a 0:09:06.160 --> 0:09:07.839 pool of blood across his desk. 0:09:08.360 --> 0:09:11.720 Billionaire Gerard DeMont. We thought it was a classic stab 0:09:11.760 --> 0:09:14.240 and grab, but nothing was stolen, and when we turned 0:09:14.320 --> 0:09:15.760 him over we found this. 0:09:16.000 --> 0:09:18.720 He points to another photo taps a small metal cage 0:09:18.760 --> 0:09:20.520 strapped to the corpse's genitalia. 0:09:20.720 --> 0:09:25.320 Ah Prince Eddie Trapp, classic Sado massacist. Device keeps your 0:09:25.320 --> 0:09:27.640 cock locked in a little cage so you can't experience 0:09:27.720 --> 0:09:31.640 pleasure unless that's your thing. Looks like this guy had 0:09:31.679 --> 0:09:33.240 more kinks than a garden hose. 0:09:33.440 --> 0:09:36.000 A woman's voice behind Jack, he was a man of 0:09:36.080 --> 0:09:39.559 large appetites. Yes, as the years passed, I wasn't always 0:09:39.600 --> 0:09:41.880 the dish he wanted, but we had a good marriage 0:09:42.440 --> 0:09:47.400 unseen until now. Evelyn Dumont thirty, soft spoken angelic. I 0:09:47.440 --> 0:09:49.839 can't bear the thought that whoever did this is still 0:09:49.840 --> 0:09:50.320 out there. 0:09:50.720 --> 0:09:52.840 I need a good detective on this, and you know 0:09:52.920 --> 0:09:53.880 this world, Jack. 0:09:54.040 --> 0:09:55.040 Not anymore, Chief. 0:09:55.280 --> 0:09:57.680 Besides, I got two weeks until retirement. 0:09:58.000 --> 0:10:04.199 Please. Detective touches his hand tenderly. Jack groans hand away. 0:10:04.800 --> 0:10:06.120 Is everything all right, mister longthing? 0:10:06.240 --> 0:10:08.760 Your hands they're like peaches in a basket. 0:10:09.120 --> 0:10:11.320 We're just asking you to blend in play the part. 0:10:11.600 --> 0:10:14.199 Find out who killed this rich pervert, no offense man, 0:10:14.800 --> 0:10:17.560 find out who did the old fuck in No offense man, 0:10:17.960 --> 0:10:20.080 One last case before you're dick deep down in the 0:10:20.120 --> 0:10:22.120 sand and key largo, no offense, ma'am. 0:10:22.240 --> 0:10:27.280 Evelyn looks at Jack with desperation. Please Jack, I need justice. 0:10:30.360 --> 0:10:34.920 Okay, yeah, wow, Yeah, I can't believe you wrote this 0:10:34.960 --> 0:10:35.360 so fast. 0:10:35.480 --> 0:10:36.360 This is amazing. 0:10:36.400 --> 0:10:37.439 Yeah, it's great. 0:10:37.559 --> 0:10:39.000 This might be the best thing you've ever written. 0:10:39.120 --> 0:10:40.840 Yeah, really great characters. 0:10:41.120 --> 0:10:52.600 I mean wow, So what's the program you're on? You 0:10:52.640 --> 0:10:53.719 don't jerk off at all? 0:10:54.320 --> 0:10:57.760 No, you masturbate all the time. You just don't ejaculate. 0:10:57.840 --> 0:11:01.200 I'm constantly waming it. I just I stop right at 0:11:01.240 --> 0:11:03.720 the tippy top and don't blow. 0:11:03.400 --> 0:11:04.920 It, Tash, How do you do that? 0:11:06.160 --> 0:11:09.600 There's some tricks. Sometimes you have to punch yourself. Sometimes 0:11:09.600 --> 0:11:12.760 you just fucking tense up and you know, grind your teeth. 0:11:12.880 --> 0:11:14.920 Oh that's why I keep hearing you in the showery 0:11:14.920 --> 0:11:17.559 whispering the whole starting lineup of the two thousand and 0:11:17.600 --> 0:11:18.240 one capitals. 0:11:18.400 --> 0:11:21.160 Yeah that's right. You can also take those little stoppers 0:11:21.200 --> 0:11:22.680 from Starbucks and put them in there. 0:11:22.800 --> 0:11:25.400 Oh wow. Okay. Well, I don't know if this is true, 0:11:25.400 --> 0:11:27.600 but I said it to many a lady in my life. 0:11:28.080 --> 0:11:30.600 I've said, if I don't do it, I'm gonna die. 0:11:30.960 --> 0:11:31.839 Is that a real thing? 0:11:32.080 --> 0:11:32.880 It's harassment? 0:11:33.280 --> 0:11:35.040 Oh, not that part about me talking to the girls. 0:11:35.080 --> 0:11:37.400 I'm talking about if if you will die? 0:11:37.480 --> 0:11:40.400 No, I mean, oh my god, you feel more alive 0:11:40.720 --> 0:11:43.480 than you've ever felt. I feel like I'm seeing through 0:11:43.559 --> 0:11:46.800 the sheen of life, another dimension. 0:11:47.160 --> 0:11:49.439 I remember I was. I had a stomach bug one 0:11:49.480 --> 0:11:51.199 week and I didn't do it and I almost went 0:11:51.240 --> 0:11:51.800 white blind. 0:11:52.080 --> 0:11:54.320 Oh man, I can't sleep if I don't take a 0:11:54.320 --> 0:11:56.440 whack on my baby crack. 0:11:56.559 --> 0:11:57.560 Why do you need to sleep? 0:11:57.840 --> 0:11:58.320 Oh? Yeah, good? 0:11:58.320 --> 0:11:59.960 Why do you need to well? 0:12:00.080 --> 0:12:01.240 Because I get tired a lot. 0:12:01.840 --> 0:12:04.200 I'm asleep at one thirty, awake at three thirty. 0:12:04.559 --> 0:12:04.760 Oh. 0:12:05.080 --> 0:12:07.079 I feel like I'm on the limitless drug. Have you 0:12:07.120 --> 0:12:08.760 ever had an out of body experience? 0:12:09.200 --> 0:12:11.800 Yeah? But just once on the duck boat last weekend? 0:12:12.120 --> 0:12:14.640 Is that his main means of transportation these days? 0:12:14.640 --> 0:12:18.079 It is huh for the listeners. Mark is doing full 0:12:18.280 --> 0:12:20.479 squats right now. It's pretty impressive. 0:12:23.400 --> 0:12:27.680 Wow, all right, just head. It just kind of snap 0:12:27.760 --> 0:12:30.040 my spine a little. I don't need to go to 0:12:30.040 --> 0:12:31.880 the chiropractor anymore. I can do it myself. 0:12:32.440 --> 0:12:33.200 Did you go before? 0:12:33.360 --> 0:12:35.559 I used to go all the time back was all 0:12:35.640 --> 0:12:38.480 jacked up. Actually, this is science. 0:12:38.720 --> 0:12:42.079 Semen is sort of fluid for your spine, so if 0:12:42.080 --> 0:12:43.880 you get rid of it too much, it'll hurt your back. 0:12:44.000 --> 0:12:45.960 Oh is that why my posture is so bad? 0:12:46.240 --> 0:12:50.040 Yeah, you keep saying science, What is the science the science. 0:12:49.720 --> 0:12:53.000 Of what of semen? Retention? Look it up, man, don't 0:12:53.040 --> 0:12:55.040 take my word for it. Look it up. I'm not 0:12:55.120 --> 0:12:56.200 doing your research for you. 0:12:56.240 --> 0:12:58.800 But it's on a lot of websites, but retention spelled 0:12:58.840 --> 0:12:59.800 wrong on all of them. 0:12:59.800 --> 0:13:02.480 Here here's a little advice for you. Do it yourself. 0:13:02.840 --> 0:13:05.520 Don't take my word for it. Be your own leader. 0:13:05.800 --> 0:13:09.679 Okay, let's go out next scene. Fuck all right? 0:13:09.760 --> 0:13:13.199 So here it is. Evelyn is asking Jack for justice. 0:13:13.240 --> 0:13:15.880 She's calling on him to be his best self. I 0:13:15.920 --> 0:13:18.760 know what that feels like in Jack's learning. But to 0:13:18.800 --> 0:13:21.280 get there, he has to journey into the city's dark 0:13:21.440 --> 0:13:25.839 sexual underground and risk getting lost in his own dangerous 0:13:25.880 --> 0:13:29.640 sexual desires. And so the prime suspect in the murder 0:13:29.679 --> 0:13:33.160 of Evelyn's husband is Sarah Fina Heartgrave. She's the madam 0:13:33.520 --> 0:13:36.760 at the city's most notorious underground sex club, and she 0:13:36.880 --> 0:13:40.640 is hot. She is just everything that Jack wants but 0:13:40.760 --> 0:13:44.120 shouldn't have. And as Jack is investigating, he's getting pulled 0:13:44.160 --> 0:13:46.840 further and further back into his old life of risky 0:13:46.920 --> 0:13:51.480 and risk a sexual deviance. Everyone is telling Jack, you know, 0:13:51.559 --> 0:13:55.040 slow down, be careful, don't get too close. So that's 0:13:55.040 --> 0:13:55.560 that's kind of. 0:13:55.520 --> 0:13:56.360 Where we are right now. 0:13:56.400 --> 0:13:57.840 So I want to jump to the scene where Sarah 0:13:57.880 --> 0:14:02.200 Fina shows up unexpected on Jack's houseboat and for the 0:14:02.280 --> 0:14:04.559 first time, takes Jack right to the edge. 0:14:04.640 --> 0:14:07.240 And this this is on page forty five. 0:14:07.320 --> 0:14:10.400 All right, I got it. Okay, Here we are interior 0:14:10.600 --> 0:14:11.600 Jack's house boat. 0:14:11.679 --> 0:14:11.839 Night. 0:14:12.520 --> 0:14:14.960 Jack is shirtless and sweaty, and he works a speed 0:14:14.960 --> 0:14:18.560 bag with focused intensity. He jumps rope faster and faster 0:14:18.640 --> 0:14:21.200 and faster. He's going as hard as he can. He's 0:14:21.240 --> 0:14:24.000 on a row machine, working himself into a lather, a 0:14:24.080 --> 0:14:27.360 man running from himself. He's doing those push ups where 0:14:27.400 --> 0:14:29.840 you jump with your hands and clap when you're at 0:14:29.880 --> 0:14:30.200 the top. 0:14:30.640 --> 0:14:31.840 Then there's a knock at the door. 0:14:32.360 --> 0:14:35.800 One second, I sit one, God damn. 0:14:36.240 --> 0:14:39.040 He opens the door. Saraphina's standing there in a trench coat. 0:14:39.400 --> 0:14:42.920 She looks him up and down, a heaving, pulsing we man. 0:14:43.200 --> 0:14:46.080 He's chiseled from stone. Her tongue touches the front of 0:14:46.080 --> 0:14:46.440 her teeth. 0:14:46.520 --> 0:14:49.240 Yeah, hold on, hold on, hold on, we're uh, we're 0:14:49.440 --> 0:14:53.240 heading into rough seas here, all right, so let me better. 0:14:53.320 --> 0:14:56.880 Let Papa take the wheel here, Brenda, okay, all right, okay, Papa, 0:14:57.040 --> 0:14:58.440 all right, I'll take the stage direction. 0:14:58.720 --> 0:15:01.080 It needs a little goose. 0:15:01.240 --> 0:15:01.560 Okay. 0:15:02.400 --> 0:15:05.440 He opens the door. Sarah finis standing near with a 0:15:05.560 --> 0:15:09.160 trench coat. She looks him up and down, a heaving, 0:15:09.520 --> 0:15:15.200 pulsing wet man chiseled from stone. Her tongue touches her 0:15:15.280 --> 0:15:15.880 front teeth. 0:15:16.000 --> 0:15:19.160 Oh mind, if I come inside? 0:15:19.800 --> 0:15:23.160 She brushes past him. He looks into the darkness to 0:15:23.200 --> 0:15:26.880 make sure they're all alone, then shuts the door. She 0:15:26.960 --> 0:15:30.920 takes off her shoes, then pours herself a drink. She 0:15:31.040 --> 0:15:33.320 looks at the picture of his family on the fridge, 0:15:33.360 --> 0:15:36.400 then peels it off and drops it into the roaring fire. 0:15:37.960 --> 0:15:39.000 What are you doing here? 0:15:39.560 --> 0:15:42.480 I found something the phone records you were looking for. 0:15:43.120 --> 0:15:46.240 Figured i'd bring it to you myself. You can't trust 0:15:46.400 --> 0:15:47.520 anyone these days. 0:15:47.600 --> 0:15:50.720 The eyes are closely I'll have the guys run it tomorrow. 0:15:50.880 --> 0:15:51.760 You shouldn't be here. 0:15:51.880 --> 0:15:54.200 It's too risky, risky for who Jack. 0:15:54.520 --> 0:15:57.440 She draws a line down his chest with her finger. 0:15:58.240 --> 0:16:03.120 He inhales her scent for both of us. She presses 0:16:03.160 --> 0:16:06.320 herself closer to him, drawing her lips near his. 0:16:06.960 --> 0:16:08.160 Don't you want me to stay? 0:16:08.520 --> 0:16:12.840 That's the problem. She slowly pulls the draw string on 0:16:12.880 --> 0:16:16.640 her trench coat until it falls open, revealing that she's 0:16:16.760 --> 0:16:20.360 completely naked underneath. She puts her arms around him and 0:16:20.400 --> 0:16:23.880 gets closer while he stays rigidly still. She opens her 0:16:23.920 --> 0:16:27.240 lips and reaches for his mouth, gently biting his lower lip. 0:16:27.480 --> 0:16:28.280 He pulls away. 0:16:29.120 --> 0:16:32.000 I can't If I go too far, I would kill 0:16:32.080 --> 0:16:32.560 us both. 0:16:33.400 --> 0:16:34.760 That sounds like a good time to me. 0:16:35.280 --> 0:16:40.520 You don't understand. I have explosives in my balls. 0:16:41.400 --> 0:16:42.720 Then let's light the match. 0:16:42.840 --> 0:16:43.640 You don't get it. 0:16:43.840 --> 0:16:46.960 There's enough actual C four implanted in my hangars to 0:16:47.000 --> 0:16:49.160 blow this boat out of the water if I ever 0:16:49.200 --> 0:16:51.040 finish cboo. 0:16:51.480 --> 0:16:52.320 She takes this in. 0:16:52.800 --> 0:16:55.360 Then I'm not looking to die, jack, but I do 0:16:55.520 --> 0:16:56.120 like to play. 0:16:56.600 --> 0:16:59.320 She steps closer to him, then lets her trench coat 0:16:59.400 --> 0:17:02.960 fall to the on the edge. She wraps her arms 0:17:03.000 --> 0:17:05.159 around him. He can't take it any longer. 0:17:05.560 --> 0:17:07.960 He grabs her and lifts her onto him, then turns 0:17:07.960 --> 0:17:11.000 and presses her back against the wall. He grinds against 0:17:11.040 --> 0:17:12.960 her as she exposes her throat to. 0:17:13.000 --> 0:17:15.920 His hungry lips. He takes her neck in his mouth, 0:17:15.960 --> 0:17:19.320 and she lets out a moan of deep and lustful surrender. 0:17:20.160 --> 0:17:22.560 She hooks his jim shorts with her toes and drops 0:17:22.560 --> 0:17:25.000 them to the floor, then wraps her legs around his 0:17:25.080 --> 0:17:28.480